Thursday, November 12, 2009

Hazing Laws Essay

Hazing should be banned in all states. It's a menace to society and another cause of deaths all around the world. Although, there are places in the world that aren't known for hazing, like Hawaii, but this is a possibility for everywhere and may be better for future. I know that people may think of this as lessening their freedom but, hazing being banned may lower the chance on death caused by hazing and I think of that as having the right to live. You can find hazing from highschool to college, to the military, in the US, Russia, Afganistan, India, all around the world. They are being broadcasted through media by television, newspapers and even can be found on the internet with very grusome pictures that should never be seen by public eyes. Trust me, you really don't. I know this is a way for you to create bonds with your sister/brother-hood but would you want to be found there with the other 1.5 million highschool students who haze? and be a part of the 43% who would find themselves humiliated?

Bibliography

http://www.insidehazing.com/statistics_25_high.php

http://www.hanknuwer.com/blog/?p=901

http://www.time.com/time/world/article/0,8599,1687207,00.html

http://www.stophazing.org/military/military_hazing.htm

http://www.nku.edu/~issues/hazing/hazing.jpe

http://gdb.rferl.org/D2E04EE2-8F25-4DBF-B35E-BA106CC17ACC_mw800_mh600.jpg

http://www.rferl.org/content/article/1065357.html

3 comments:

  1. Arleen,
    You did an okay job..
    But I think you can do way better on expressing and using more of the gathered information.
    You have to make it not your opinion and more of a regular essay.
    You just have to try your best!
    but keep up the good work!
    -Jisel

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  2. Arleen,
    your draft is pretty short but i understand. You just fave to remember that in the revision it should be longer and well descriptive. Don't forget the outline for writing an essay: intro, body, and conlusion.
    Have fun doing your revision! :)

    -thea

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  3. Hi Arleen,

    I agree with your commentators that this essay needs to be completed. You need to establish a thesis that will be a genuine argument. Right now, you don't seem to have one.
    You have quite a few sources...work through those and then figure out your argumentative statement.
    mrs s

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